浙江省A9名校协作体8月联考应用文解析讲义
浙江省A9联盟8月返校联考  应用文解析与下水范文
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一、【原题呈现】
第一节（满分 15 分）
假定你是李华，你在暑期里参观了市博物馆举办的一次“遇见中国戏曲”（Meet the Chinese opera）的展览，请你为你校英文报写一则评论，内容包括：
1.展览概况；
2.观展感受；
3.提出建议。
注意：
1. 词数 80 左右；
2. 开头和结尾已给出，可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
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二、【审题分析】
采取Q-A模式分析
Q1：本题体裁是评论，需要明晰的基本信息是什么？
A1：
评论者：
“I”（Li Hua）
供稿对象：
校英文报
是否需要自我介绍：
☐是 
☑否 
☐均可
行文语气：
☑正式 
☐非正式
主题背景：
你在暑期里参观了市博物馆举办的一次“遇见中国戏曲”（Meet the Chinese opera）的展览，请你为你校英文报写一则评论
使用时态：
一般过去时；一般现在时
使用人称：
第三人称（客观阐述展览概况）；第一人称（个人感受）
Q2：写评论这种体裁需要注意什么？
A2：
①切忌出现书信体、演讲体等传统体裁格式；
②评论首先要阐述活动的内容，需要先有评论对象的概况，叙述客观；
③评论要突出“评价”“讨论”两个基本点，“评价”对标题干要求中的“观展感受”，“讨论”则对标题干要求中的“建议”，需运用合适的词汇和与语境适配的语料。
Q3：展览概况的阐述偏主观还是客观？概况包含哪些方面的内容？
A3：客观。
概况一词比较笼统，因而留给学生的写作空间也较大，可以从展览的地点、时间、展览内容、参与人员等多个方面入手，建议可以写的简练一些，还可以拓展思维去写展览对于全市精神文明的促进作用，呼应题干中“市博物馆”这一个隐含的限制。
描写概况素材：
①The exhibition showcased the abundant and vibrant world of Chinese opera, offering a comprehensive overview of its history, costumes, music, and performances.
②I recently had the opportunity to visit the "Meet the Chinese Opera" exhibition held at the city museum during the summer vacation.
③The exhibition featured a diverse collection of artifacts, including intricate costumes, traditional musical instruments, and detailed explanations of the different types of opera.
Q4：观展感受可以怎么构思？有哪些素材可以使用？
A4：观展感受就是偏主观性强一些，因为是李华本人参与了展览，每个人的看法都会不同。写的时候可以结合中华优秀传统文化角度、民族文化传承、艺术熏陶等角度展开。同时，为了更好地迎合第三个命题要点（提出建议），所以感受还可以写一点不足之处，但是积极的感受和影响应该是占大部分的。
描写感受素材：
①The display of traditional opera costumes was awe-inspiring, with delicate designs and vivid colors that truly brought the characters to life.
②The exhibition also provided detailed information about the different types of opera and their regional variations, which deepened my understanding and appreciation for this ancient art form.
③As I walked through the exhibition, I was immersed in the captivating world of Chinese opera. The vibrant colors and intricate details of the costumes were truly breathtaking.
④I could almost imagine the performers on stage, bringing the stories to life with their expressive gestures and powerful voices. The exhibition also offered interactive activities, allowing visitors to try on opera costumes and learn basic movements, which added an engaging element to the experience.
高级词汇积累：precipitation and quintessence 沉淀与精华
E.g. According to designers for the school, Chinese colors are the precipitation and quintessence of Chinese culture, as well as the best educational resource for cultivating aesthetic qualities and cultural self-confidence.【摘自China Daily】
给云锦小学做设计的设计师表示，中式彩是中国文化的沉淀与精髓，也是培养审美素养和文化自信最好的教育资源。
Q5：个人建议可以如何考虑？需要写很多条吗？
A5：
  写作时需要明确，本文的核心是评论，而不是建议信，所以建议一般一条就够了，涵盖这个要点即可，重心还是应该放在前两个要点上。
建议可用素材：
①I suppose it could be better if more multimedia elements could be incorporated into the exhibition.
②It would be beneficial to have more interactive displays that allow visitors to experience the different aspects of opera, such as learning about the makeup techniques or trying their hand at traditional musical instruments.
③Including some live performances never fails to be a fabulous idea.
三、【写作分解】
段落
提示
内容
第一段
阐述展览概括，包括时间地点内容等多个角度的信息
第二段
观展感受【主观感知+心理活动】
第三段
用委婉语气给出建议，注意措辞的委婉性。
四、【范文欣赏】
官方范文：
Gary_Ge老师下水：转载自：高中英语相关备课资料分享
A visit to the "Encountering Chinese Opera" exhibition at the local museum this summer was an enlightening experience.
The exhibition showcased a broad spectrum of Chinese opera genres, offering a window through which I could dip my toe into the world of opera. During the exhibition, "The Drunken Beauty," a Peking Opera performance, left a lasting impression on me with its portrayal of a touching love story set in the illustrious era of the Tang D
ynasty, depicting the romance between Emperor Xuanzong and Yang Yuhuan.
Undeniably, this exhibit was a captivating journey and it fostered a deeper appreciation for this integral part of Chinese culture. However, the exhibition could benefit from better English translations as well as more interactive elements like commentators to more effectively engage a broader audience.
五、【试题共鸣】
假如你是李华，你刚刚参观了你市博物馆举办的一次“遇见艺术家”的展览，请为你校英文报写一则评论，内容包括：
1.展览概况；
2.观展感受(印象深刻的画家，作品或流派)；
3.意见建议。
注意：1.写作词数应为80左右; 2.为使行文连贯，可以适当增加细节。
【参考范文】
Last Saturday, I just visited an exhibition titled “Meeting Artists” held by our city’s museum. The exhibition attracted many masters and amateurs at home and abroad.
Many artworks including Chinese handwriting and landscape paintings from ancient and modern times were on show. The host explained every work in details on the spot. The exhibition left a deep impression on me. In my view, it not only promoted the inheritance of Chinese traditional culture but strengthened our national pride as well. I hope there will be more activities like this in the future.

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