少儿英语作文备考攻略
少儿英语作文备考攻略
写作是对孩子综合能力的考核,因为作文需要词汇、语法、时态和句式的综合运用。今天店铺就给大家带来少儿英语作文备考攻略,欢迎大家查看。
我们先来看四篇作文范例,分析一下这些作文分别有什么亮点和不足之处。
作文范例一和作文范例二来自3E官方网址提供的3E少儿英语听读写测试(三级),这两篇文章各有特点,但是为什么范例一比范例二分数高?我们来看看专家的分析。
作文范例一:
Where do you like going at weekends
I like going to the park at weekends. We can have a picnic with friends there on the grass. It’s very interesting. It’s autumn, we can fly kites in the park. I like flying kites very much. I can read book under the tree. I also like sitting on the grass. I like going to the park, becaus
e I can have a good time there.
得分:8.5 (满分10分)
专家分析:
综述:思路清晰,先说一个主导的想法:我喜欢在周末去公园,随后写了一些喜欢去公园的理由:可以去野餐,秋天可以去放风筝,可以在树下读书等等;拼写正确,文字干净,语言比较准确。 需要提高的地方有:思路可以更开阔一些,句式也应该更加丰富一些。
细节点评:
1. 作文开头交待一个主导想法:“I like going to the park”,结尾采用因果句式,既回应了开头的主导想法,又交代了喜欢去公园的原因:“because I can have a good time there.”
2. 作文中间部分交待了具体细节,如可以野餐,可以放风筝,可以在树下看书等,总的来说,行文没有任何阻滞的迹象。
3. 词组搭配准确,符合英语表达的习惯,没有生编硬造,如:have a picnic, on the grass,
under the tree, have a good time等。
4. 文中用at weekends, 没错,但也可以用on weekends。美国人更倾向于使用on weekends.
5. 两处语言错误(文中以红标示);
1) “It’s autumn, we can fly kites in the park.” 此句将两个简单句机械地并在一起,缺乏连接词,是病句,可以调整为 “If it is autumn, we can fly kites in the park.” 如此修改,不仅语言正确,而且句式也更加富于变化。
2) “I can read book under the tree.” 此句中,book 为可数名词,应该改为read a book 或read books,当然,如果改为do some reading则更好.
作文范例二:
Where do you like going on weekends
I like going to the park on weekends. In the park, there are some children play on the slid
es and the swings. I like playing them too. Look! My friend Alice is playing on the slide. We are so happy! In the park, there are some butterflies on the flower. They’re beautiful, isn’t it? Look! A boy is picking the flowers! Let’s say: “Don’t pick flowers.” Great!The boy isn’t picking the flowers. I like the park. Do you like it?
得分:7.5(满分10分)
专家分析:
综述:思路活跃,内容比较丰富,拼写正确,表达比较流畅。 可惜之处是,相对于小作者活跃的思维,他的语言掌控能力略显薄弱,因而出现一些语言错误,而且内容的交代也欠缺逻辑性。
细节点评:
1. 开门见山,交待说出了短文的主导思想,“I like going to the park on weekends.”
2. 情节性比较强,如 “there are butterflies on the flower”, “A boy is picking the flowers”等。
3. 小作者注意了避免句式单一化的问题,如采用了 There be句式、感叹句、反意疑问句、祈使句等句式;一般现在时和现在进行时的使用比较准确。
4. 欠缺之处:
1) 具体内容之间缺乏顺滑的连接,如“Look! My friend… ”是第三人称单数,后面则陡然出现了“We”。当然,既要注意句式的丰富性,又要注意前后连接的逻辑性,这是有一定的挑战性的。
2) 三处语言错误(文中以红标示),分别可以改为:“there are some children playing on…”; “I like playing on them, too”, “They are beautiful, aren’t they?”
有些表达可以做得更好,如 “children play on the slide”,这里如果用“children have much fun on the slide”或许更符合英语表达习惯。
上面两篇作文的共同优点是都采用开门见山的方式,在文章开头交代文章的主旨。第二篇作文在内容上和句式的运用上都比第一篇丰富,可谓亮点多多,但是为什么分数没有第一篇高呢?原因是第二篇的错误(语法错误和逻辑错误)比第一篇多,所以孩子们在考试的时候,
尽量不要使用不熟悉的高级句式或者词汇,以免造成语法错误,弄巧成拙,首先要保证用法正确,其次再去追求作文的亮点。
作文范例三:
My Favourite Season
What is your favourite season? Mine is summer, because I can do my favourite things in summer.
First, I can wear lovely skirts and beautiful dresses in summer. These are my favourite clothes. Second, I can go swimming every day in summer, and it is my favourite sport. Then I can enjoy my favourite weather in summer, because I love sunny days and there is much sunshine in summer. Besides, I can eat a lot of sweet ice cream in summer, and everybody knows it is my favourite snack.
I love summer.
点评:
这篇文章非常有条理,有两点值得小朋友们学习。
1.逻辑词。文章用了first,second,then,besides(除此之外)四个词非常清晰的引导四个喜欢夏天的理由。
2.除了逻辑词之外,可以观察一下,文章的body部分用了四个favourite,也是引导这四个理由,这使得原因叙述非常清晰,且有层次感。
作文范例四:
A Visit to Central Park
It was a Sunday. After doing my homework, I went to the Central Park to relax.
It rained the day before, and the park still looked a little wet. There were water drops on the grass and trees, which made them look greener. There is a church in the park. Some people went to church on Sunday, and I could hear the singing from the church. I walked around the park for a while. Then I sat on a bench watching the pet dogs running on the lawn. After visiting the park, I felt energetic to study again.
点评:
本篇文章的主题是:到XX地一游。此类文章结构不难,去哪里-看见什么-做了什么-感觉如何,小朋友们都能非常完整的完成写作。
文章的亮点在于句式多样化,、、定语从句、比较级,可以任意选择2~3种句式积累起来,用于自己的作文中。
另外,文章通篇使用了一般过去时,时态统一永远是最最基础最最重要的!
看了上面的几篇范文,我们可以看出,以下这几个方面能够增加文章的亮点:
(1)开门见山,点明主旨
(2)句式多样化增加文章的层次感
(3)使用逻辑词增加文章的条理性
(4)使用符合英语习惯的`词组搭配
在了解了写作过程中可以增加作文的亮点之后,接下来,店铺带大家看看三笔作文如何备考及考试注意事项。
一、如何备考
1、词汇
英语三级作文万能模板如果在文章中能够正确使用一些高级词汇,而不再是简单词汇拼凑,这会让老师耳目一新。例如:如果要孩子们来写holiday。很多孩子们一开始就会写I went to …… last year. 用went就很大众化了,但是如果用take a trip这个词组就会显得你的英语水平跟其他人不一样了!对于词汇这个点,店铺向孩子们提三点建议:
(1)词汇需要平时积累,但是大家积累的时候一定要注意灵活使用学过的词。大家已经学过很多单词、词组和句式了,可是大家都不会拿出来用,原因就是在于大家学的时候只记得了它的意思,没有认识该怎么使用,该在什么情况下使用。所以大家以后学习词汇的时候一定要翻翻词典学习例句,自己也拿来造个句子,就知道以后该怎么用了。
(2)逻辑词的使用可以增加文章的条理性。
常用的逻辑词:
1)first, second, last but not least
2)firstly, secondly, finally
3)to begin with,then,furthermore
4)on one hand, on the other hand
5)besides
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